The Ghosts of Amontillado Fumes

Tunnels are made of Poe things that go thump-thump… through the red in your bones, thump-thump… until they squeeze the tell-tale frenzy bruising the inside of your chest.

When I was swallowed by my first tunnel, I screamed. My face smacked the deck with a crunch that leaked through my ears. The pain stunk of rot and the ghosts of Amontillado fumes.

Something laughed, and shouted, “I advise you—”

“No,” I said, eyes open, knowing an unsolicited advice is as needed as an enema is erotic.

I was frightened, but I would face the dark with my Self unmolested.

 

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– for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. To read all the yummy tales that emerged out of this tunnel, follow this link.

71 thoughts on “The Ghosts of Amontillado Fumes”

  1. Beautiful writing. Stunning! I love the use of Poe as an adjective and the title is perfect. I hope Terrible is not being too arduous for you at the moment, Magaly and send you best of wishes, Jilly 🙂

  2. I tried to post a comment but it disappeared so I’ll try again and you may get two! I loved the use of Poe as an adjective and the whole post is absolutely excellent. I read it as a metaphor for battling addiction which for sure is a dark tunnel where a sufferer can also fall victim to unsolicited advice. And, Magaly, what I also wanted to say is I hope that Terrible is not giving you too tough a time right now, Jilly.

    • Yay! I got seconds. 😀

      You’ve described one of my favorite things about fiction (and art in general), the way it lets us see different things through the same words. I can definitely see how this could apply to addiction–everybody seems to know somebody who did something everyone must try. Rarely do they stop to really listen to their own words. Or, if the miracle cure can apply to everybody’s sort of darkness.

  3. When I was swallowed by my first tunnel, I screamed.

    This line says it all for me.. about the fears we must face while we live, and how in may tear us apart, even as it makes us stronger.

    Such an effective and emotional piece, Magaly.

  4. Dang, what a visceral piece! It made me squirm, until that end- which made me cheer. The horror of the beginning made that end just that much more bold and powerful.

  5. I read your story a couple of times. It is wonderfully different, intriguing in how it conveys a deep possibly dark struggle for the character.

  6. I’ll be honest, I’m not entirely sure what your story is about…but I am sure that the feelings you evoked are so vivid. I feel the fear around me and I hear the thumping noises but I’m not sure why or where they’re coming from. In that aspect, the not-knowing made the emotions all the more vivid!

    • The description of the feelings and the sense of fear suggest that you got exactly what the story was about–those unseen hurts and horrors that torture a soul until it loses the battle to madness, or… until it glares back into the darkness and sets it aflame.

  7. Your piece is full of innuendo that makes me want to keep reading it to see what more i can find hidden there.. and your comment thread is quite a read in itself!! thank you on both counts..

  8. I knew the dark places you where going with the fumes of Amontillado… a truly frightening story by Poe, and how great that you used it as a metaphor for other dark places you have. I can only wonder who’s the mason in this case…?

  9. Wonderful imagery, metaphor and word usage with a lot of emotional tugging of the soul. Each reader will devise their own meaning but you have given them so much to work with.

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